Audience essay
feedback:
WWW:
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Great analytical writing ability – some great
topic sentences and vocabulary which relates to the statement.
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Added some media terminology – ‘consumer,
digital media and binge-watching’
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Balanced arguments which you have provided
sufficient advantages and disadvantages for each industry.
EBI:
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Add more examples for the newspaper industry
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Pay more attention to spelling, grammar and word
choice. Consider copying your essay into Microsoft Word and correct any
words/sentences with red and blue lines
LR:
1. Develop newspaper industry paragraph – adding more
examples of ‘citizen journalism’ examples and how the industry has changed due
to the rise of the internet
2. Add key media terminology look back at your notes, blog
and GLoW
3. Check SPaG throughout essay
LR:With the rise of the internet citizen journalism is on the rise as well for anyone can just simply take out their phone and record a situation and then turn it into news.This endangers newspapers like the daily mirror but empowers papers like the guardian.This is because the rise of the internet increases the amount of people that look for online news which the guardian provides however the daily mirror doesn't provide that , this will decrease the profit the daily mirror makes.
LR:With the rise of the internet citizen journalism is on the rise as well for anyone can just simply take out their phone and record a situation and then turn it into news.This endangers newspapers like the daily mirror but empowers papers like the guardian.This is because the rise of the internet increases the amount of people that look for online news which the guardian provides however the daily mirror doesn't provide that , this will decrease the profit the daily mirror makes.
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